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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Other, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that many people at the present day think that school plays an important role in teaching many students to become a good
person
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 in their society. While some people argue that
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 duty should be their
parents
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. From my point of view, I think that both school and
parents
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 have the important duty to teach their
kids
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 to be good members of society. In the following paragraph, both views of
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 topic will be outlined in the detail. It is true to say that
parents
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 are the
first
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 teacher of their children. They should teach basic knowledge of being a good person in the community, and many toddlers should be educated about basic survival in various situations by their
parents
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.
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, the family should teach
kids
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 not to speak harshly to others, saying thank you after someone makes somethings to them, and saying apologize after they make somethings wrong.
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,
parents
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 should educate standard
responsibility
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responsibilities
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 to their
kids
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such
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 as keeping and cleaning toy
station
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 by themselves after they play
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.
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, these duties depend not only on fathers and mothers but
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 on many
teachers
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 in the school. Many
teachers
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 should educate their students in terms of
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 knowledge and information.
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, the
teachers
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 should educate their pupils to correctly use the roles, duties and freedoms of their pupils in the right way.
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, the basic law should be taught by the
teachers
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 due to some
parents
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 do not have the right information to teach their
kids
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, and the
teachers
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 should take the punishment lessons to their students, like if they make somethings illegal, how will they be punished? In conclusion, I strongly believe that both
parents
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 and
teachers
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 play an important role in the improvement of their toddlers to be a good
person
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people
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 in the future.
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, it is recommended that collaborating with
parents
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 and
teachers
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 to make children
to
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be good members
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 the community is the best way.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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