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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree

#growth #shops #town #cities
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 many people believe that buying needed things
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online tend to
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 outlets of urban areas, I think in a reverse manner and disagree with the given statement. Whereas, my inclination is justified in the ensuing paragraphs.
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 of all the arguments of the topic, the strongest one to prove my view is, there is no face to face interaction with knowledgeable and helpful sales staff which is part of the pleasure of shopping . A good example of
this
 is, if a customer who has not
a knowledge
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 about brands or operating systems what he going to buy is and needs some support from a helper,
onling
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online
shppoing
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shipping
shopping
 is not worthy.
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, I mean
buyer
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 wants direct support from the seller to buy a product.
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, the other reason to prove point is, once a retailer has got your e-mail address they keep bombarding you with unsolicited e-mails and special offers.
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 of that, it may
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to
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 missed
the
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important mails.
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 to that fraud and security breaches remain
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 for concern for both consumers and
relailers
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retailers
.
On the other hand
 contrary , some people counterclaim the mentioned support. The foremost argument they do is the range of products available online is
pratically
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practically
 unlimited and
also
 virtually any products you can think of can be delivered straight to your doorstep.
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, to wrap up the discussion, it can be said that despite points of
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 of products with
vast
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 range and arrange easy delivery methods, my reasons that point of ,direct interaction and help from outlet workers, as well as avoiding disturbances after finishing shopping are logically acceptable.
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