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Some people believe that annual exams are the best way of assessment while others believe that regular appraisals are better. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both

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 advanced world,science and technology have helped improve all aspects of life,even in
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 system.While,some thinks that yearly examinations for
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 excellent choice of evaluating,
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 of the people think daily basis evaluations are better than that.In
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the merits
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 and demerits of each
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annual exams positives and negatives. Apparently,the main benefit of
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method
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 is that,not only, it can
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measure
students
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 long time memory power , but
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, they can have a
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 day-to-day school life.Whereas,the main drawback of
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 if the candidate
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 sick or
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 other personal or family problems during the annual
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 time, it will spoil his/her whole
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 effort.
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, I can tell it from my experience.I was preparing one year exclusively for a medical entrance
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 after my higher secondary education,
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 was doing well in all mock
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were
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 conducted in our institution,Unfortunately,just prior to my
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 was diagnosed with
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- it is a communicable disease,so
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 have to be isolated for a
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particular
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 couldn't attend the
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,
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 I lost my precious one year there.
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, I will note
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regular appraisals advantages and disadvantages. Tacitly,it is the best way of evaluating
students
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 capability.
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The teacher
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Teacher
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Teachers
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 can notice the changes of a student
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every day and give an internal mark,
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 they will be very obedient and disciplined in class.One of the best
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benefits
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 is ,kids will
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 school with enough
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,and they will be very active in class.At the same time,
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 disadvantage of
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 is,people just
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mug up
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 day they just present it in front of
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the teacher
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,most of them won't try to understand what they are studying,for
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 run it will not help them,they won't be able to apply what they studied now in future. To conclude, both
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 have
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 own positive sides and negative sides.
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 prefer daily basis evaluation rather than
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a yearly
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 basis with proper
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guidance
 to
students
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, that they should learn things not only for getting marks in
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but
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 for their future.
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