The best way to solve the world‘s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
A group of
people
believe that increasing the price
of fuel
is the ideal method to combat environmental issues across the globe. I, on the other hand
, do not agree with this
argument since it appears to me that the best way of dealing with this
problem is to increase awareness of this
issue
.
Although
I cannot deny that raising the fuel
price
would alleviate this
issue
in the short term, the problem will remain the same for a long period. The main reason is that in human psychology the more you increase the demand the more people
work hard to achieve it. Thus
, from this
standpoint, it could be said that if a fuel
price
is raised to handle the global environmental problems
, people
will try not to lose their demand, which is fuel
in this
case or in other words
convenience. In this
way, they will not even be aware of solving global environmental issues. Instead
, folks will consider this
change as punishment.
Nevertheless
, I firmly believe that solving this
problem is related to people
themselves or their minds. If starting from school years everyone is educated about the importance of natural resources and protecting them, it would have long-lasting effects. Apart from
this
, if social networking websites are forced to prepare programs about the significance of nature and solving existing problems
in this
manner, it is more likely to have positive effects. The main reason for this
is that it is the social media that controls people
's minds. Therefore
, if we focus on informing and educating individuals about the issue
, it is highly probable that environmental problems
will be handled on a global scale.
In conclusion, I consider that while
it is true that a high fuel
price
can somehow have positive effects on eradicating global problems
that are related to the environment, it will not be continuous. The best method to combat the issue
is to develop individuals' understanding.Submitted by aydinaliyew on
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