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It is common for people to travel long distances for work and study. Some argue that longer commute times affect people in a negative way while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether spending
long
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a long
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time
 to arrive at work and institutions of education affect people negatively or not. In
this
 essay, I am going to examine
this
 question from both points of view and
then
 explain why I believe the arguments for the side effects are stronger. There are people who argue that the disadvantages of
traveling
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travelling
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 long distances considerably outweigh its benefits. The main reason for believing
this
 is that the amount of
time
 to arrive
in
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at
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 the destination could be used in many useful ways,
such
 as having breakfast with
family
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the family
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 or running in the park. It is
also
 possible to say that spending a long
time
into
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in
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the
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apply
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transportation could increase the level of stress and bring diseases. To illustrate, the feeling of anxiety when you arrive at work late due to the heavy traffic.
On the other hand
, others believe that
commiting
Correct your spelling
committing
 a long
time
 has some advantages. It is often argued that it is a precious self-
time
. People often have
this
 opinion because, for somebody,
this
 is the most relaxing
time
 of the day. A
second
 point is that individuals could use
this
 moment to execute a
second
 task simultaneously and acquire
knowledgment
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knowledge
acknowledgement
.
For example
, listening to a podcast or audiobook. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I feel that travelling long distances to work or study could bring negatives effects in a short period of
time
.
This
 is because after a period of
time
 some individuals could starting to
wander
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wonder
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 why they still spend their precious hours in transport and not in another better option
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