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In western countries people spend a lot of money on their pets.What are advantages and disadvantages?

Irrefutably ,
pets
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 are true companions of humans.People in western countries lavishly spend on
their
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 and many people have more than one
pet
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.It is
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status
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 symbol of filthy rich people to have a
petbof
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pet of
 superior breed.As every coin has two sides having a
pet
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also
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 has merits and demerits which are discussed in the following paragraph. To embark with advantages, a
pet
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 is a true friend who gives unconditional love to its
owner
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. An
owner
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 never
feel
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 lonely in its presence , as a
pet
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 gives immense love and affection which
consequently
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 cheers up the mood of a person.Despite
of
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the friendly attitude
pets
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 are very helpful to keep a house safe from
avoid
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 theft.They serve the security purpose as well.To illustrate, a dog always
alert
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 his
owner
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 by barking
uf
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if
 he finds unusual thing or a person in the house.
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Also
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 there are specific breeds of dogs
that’s
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that are
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 are used by policemen to find the camps of
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a terrorist
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terrorist
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 because of
smelling
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the smelling
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 skill of dogs.
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,
pets
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 have an extraordinary
senses
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 to sense the danger or any natural disaster like earthquake beforehand. As every garden has
weed
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 these are some disadvantages of getting
pets
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 as well.They need nurturing and pampering
owner
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 need to take care of the personal hygiene of their
pets
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 it can cause various ailments to the
pet
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.
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 to it , one can never leave
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pet
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a pet
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 all alone at home for
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more
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lore
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more
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 than certain hours.To epitomise , if a family going on vacation either they have to leave the
pet
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 at someone’s house for care or leave it at a
pet
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 shelter.On
the
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top of that , in
case
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the case
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 of dog particular , if a dog bite stranger it will have serious consequences
of
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it
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because
in
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 western countries ,there are proper rules and regulations.A victim can take legal action on the
owner
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 of the
pet
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. To recapitulate, there are both pros and cons of having a
pet
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.The
owner
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 should take care and be fully responsible for the well-being and behaviour of the
pet
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.

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