Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Many
people
argue that an individual’s ethnic personalities and other special
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identical
issues are affected by their hometowns directly. Yet, geographical effects are how important on
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cultural development of a person whether fully crucial or not. In my opinion,
country
of origin is playing
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an enormous
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role to define
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communities
culture
.
People’s
ethnic identifies and their main countries are not be
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held
seperately
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separately
. On the one hand, a number of
people
accepted that a person’s
culture
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not affected directly
from
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their
country
of origin. As a reason
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this
thought, adults create their language, abilities and other
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identical
identifiable
facts by themselves.
For instance
, a friend of mine who is living in Turkey is from Germany, but she get used to
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as
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Turkish public as well. She does not cook any German traditional foods and she does not
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any German conventional songs. She carries only a lack of believes from her homeland when she
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time with her relatives. The cultural
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is not a reflection of
people’s
country
because
people
have a vital qualification: adaptation.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that
people’s
own
culture
and their
country
of origin is
inseperable
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inseparable
facts.
This
is because
people
get used to
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, behave and live like what they gain features from their
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geography
and these consequences can not change easily. As
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essantial
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essential
example, my mother is from Istanbul,
although
she has been living since 1990 in Moscow and her abilities are the same
with
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other Turkish
people
.
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Communities
are reflect
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attitutes
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attitudes
of their countries where they come from. In conclusion, a person’s
culture
is affected by their homeland, but
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of effect
is depend
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on
people’s
personal characters. In some cases, individuals
are directly show
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their state’s cultural effects,
on the contrary
, in some
cases
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people
are affected
negligible
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when comparing with each other.
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