Many people believe that living a city life offers greater benefits as compared to the countryside? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

City
Life is more active and
offer
Change the verb form
offers
show examples
more opportunities. In my opinion, the countryside
offer
Change the verb form
offers
show examples
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
show examples
benefits compared to
City
life . I will give more details about my opinion in the following paragraph.
Firstly
, the
city
is the
place
where
majority
Add an article
the majority
a majority
show examples
of the population lives.
This
is the best
place
to develop , show and increase
once
Correct your spelling
one
show examples
potential as
individual
Add an article
an individual
show examples
.
For instance
, someone from the countryside who
Correct your spelling
has
show examples
as
Correct your spelling
has
show examples
been living with the same routine in the same environment will be confronted
to
Change preposition
with
show examples
a new lifestyle.He will face different challenges and have no choice
than
Change preposition
but
show examples
to adapt himself to his new environment.
This
new adaptation can help him develop new skills and bring out his true potential while facing some difficulties.
Furthermore
, the
city
is the best
place
to start a business. Because of the urge growth in population, once product can be known in a short period of time .
This
will have
positive
Add an article
a positive
show examples
influence on future sales .
Moreover
, The competition among companies shops and
salers
Correct your spelling
sales
within the society can push us to be more creative and take us out of our
confort
Correct your spelling
comfort
zone.
For example
, a farmer who wants to increase his commerce can go to the
city
to get wholesalers who can buy his products .
This
will help
him
Change the pronoun
his
show examples
growth
Replace the word
grow
show examples
in sales , getting new customers as well as adding new strategies to have a quality product
which
Correct pronoun usage
that
show examples
can make him popular among people. To conclude, the
city
is the best
place
to grow once business and
also
boost once potential as individuals .
In
addition
Add a comma
,addition
show examples
it is the best
place
to find
Add an article
an opportunity
show examples
opportunity
Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
show examples
as well as meeting new people who can take us to the
next
level in life.
Submitted by Birguit Avagbo on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: