Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Certain
amount of youth Add an article
A certain
have
been tending to shift urban areas while letting only elders Change the verb form
has
to
live in the villages. Fix the infinitive
apply
However
, the influx of youths to larger cities have optimistic points on development
, although
significant negative impacts have been arising with mentioned
issue.
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the mentioned
a mentioned
This
essay will incline with the latter view and I will mention both
positive and negative impacts while giving proper arguments.
Anticipating a better life, the trend of young
generation crossing born borders towards urban capitals has been creating notable Correct article usage
the young
issues
in both
social and developmental aspects.
The low youth workforce in rural areas drastically increasing, where begin
with agriculture and industrials Add the particle
to begin
labor
force, Change the spelling
labour
moreover
extend to innovative Add a comma
,moreover
enterpreneurships
and Correct your spelling
entrepreneurship
in
contrast
it has been creating enormous competition to the limited resources in urban areas, which highly impact on sustainable Add a comma
,contrast
development
of a country. Rather than developmental matters, sensible social and personal issues
have been creating which directly involve in mental
Add an article
the mental
wellbeing
of elders Correct your spelling
well-being
whom
live alone in the countryside , like elderly depressions, anxiety disorders, Bipolar disorders which leads Change the pronoun
who
person
to serious physical health Add an article
a person
the person
issues
like Insomnia, High blood pressure and strokes.
Therefore
, adolescents moving towards capitals
have been creating tremendous Fix the agreement mistake
capital
issues
in both
quantitative and qualitative aspects of the development
of a country.
Conversely
, influx youth towards metropolitan have positive outcomes which grow an individual in both
personal and social forms.
As they have more access to higher studies and career development
, youths have been enforcing with skills and experience whom ready to compete with world
by knowledge and talents rather being trapped to locally or regionally.
To conclude, though the young generation moving towards capitals by leaving Add an article
the world
olders
at countryside have been reaching its climax , by improving infrastructures and opportunities on born sites will give fair solution to Correct your spelling
holders
both
younger and older generations to overcome negatives while improving the positives to the soceity
.Correct your spelling
society
city
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