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as countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in a small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society?

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In recent times,
people
 prefer to live alone or in a nuclear family way, which is a result of the development of a country. There are reasons for
this
 trend which has
also
 affected
society
. In
this
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 I will be explaining more of the reasons and how it has affected
society
.
Firstly
, the development and growth of a country have encouraged
individuals
 to be able to live alone in terms of the innovation of technology.
Therefore
, they can reach out to other
people
 through various means and do not have to live with these
people
, especially the extended family members.
Also
, in the bit of being able to take up financial responsibilities,
people
 tend to live in small family units so that they have a minimal number of
people
 to cater for. Nowadays,
people
 want to be able to raise their children with minimal external interference. All these contribute to the causes of
individuals
 living alone or in little units.
Moreover
, these reasons have affected
society
 positively, and how
people
 behave in
society
.
Individuals
 are able to give mutual respect to themselves because there is no over-familiarity. On
this
 note,
people
also
 tend to be self-conscious in
society
.
In addition
, children are well behaved due to the fact that they are being trained with minimal external interference.
For example
, a child brought up by minimal
individuals
 mostly by the parents, is been guided well on how to behave, compared to the child brought up by the whole community. To conclude, the demography of a country
as a result
 of development has made
people
 live alone and appreciate living in small units.
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  • urbanization
  • migration
  • limited living space
  • economic independence
  • nuclear families
  • social norms
  • isolation
  • mental health issues
  • real estate market
  • housing shortages
  • social care
  • extended family networks
  • public provision
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