Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Hitting students to get them under their best behaviour is
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practice. Some of these people believe that spanking children would make them more organized in their work. I completely disagree with
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statement because it would make students becoming more
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aggressive
in the long term and affect their mental health. Parents who beat their
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children
should know that beating their little ones in the long
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could have a negative impact on their behaviour
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instead
of getting them disciplined and make them
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.
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may be because constantly being in an environment
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they are physically punished for doing a small mistake. The Americal institute of
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physiology
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research in which they found that smacking children could lead
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aggression
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in them and
also
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social crime in the long term.
Moreover
, it may
also
affect their mental status. As constantly getting physically harmed due to the beating can lead them to stress and affect their mental health. Studies have
also
shown that
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incidence
incidents
cause
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trauma
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and can even lead to various diseases
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, blood pressure etc. To conclude, the idea of beating students to get them in right
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behaviours
behaviour
is totally unacceptable as various other punishments which are not physical could be given to get them
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disciplined
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