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In some countries,owing a home rather than renting one is very important for some people, Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation.

It is common these days to find landlords and landladies than tenants as some people find
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 very valuable as many experiences may have resulted in
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 decision.as
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 think
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 to be a negative
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,the cause of
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 selective choice by several individuals varies from person to person as
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 major factor is the drastic increase
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 prices of rented homes,depending on the location whereas no change has occurred structurally or with facilities concerning the building.
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,Most house owners display a controlling
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 to their tenants by always giving them a
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 limit to carry out nearly all or every
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,
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 in and
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 out as well as light in and light out
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 is usually so uncalled for and as
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 inconveniencing for tenants. Some people may describe
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 as a positive
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 as
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 harsh treatment will serve as the only avenue of motivation to enable them
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 a house,
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 think
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,most especially when it wasn't part of your actual plan for the moment as
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 will require a large amount of
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's finance to enable them
purchase
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, even if on
mortgage
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the mortgage
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 as a certain percentage will have to be paid as the rest should be made available within a specific period of
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.Failure to do so might lead to forfeiting the property or issuance of notice to vacate the property.
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 being considered a basic need and a necessity to ensure survival as it
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 independence and a sense of security. In conclusion,owning a home is a good thought as
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 is to be considered a form of luxury but unfortunately not a necessity for everyone,as some individuals may not have the financial capacity to purchase,as well as maintain
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,most especially a common man with a low income earning whose needs and wants are targeted towards survival as with daily food,as he tries to better his/her life.
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 wouldn't seem as a
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necessity
 for him or her as he or she has other priorities set to achieve which is why
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 think
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situation
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 to be an unpleasant
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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