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Topic 6: Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others?

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Development
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The development
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 of a country is gauged by the
progress
 reflected in a particular country,some people think
otherwise
.In
this
essay
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i
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I
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 will explore the advantages and
disdavantages
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disadvantages
 and give a conclusion.
To begin
 with, a number of economies in the world are rated according to the value and strength of their
currency
;Once the
currency
 is stable you will find out that the cost of living is stable,the government is in a position to take care of its citizen,the roads are taken good care of,education becomes a priority and not a necessity,construction of hospitals is considered very important to take care of its peoples well being .
For
instance
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 the western world economies is a sight to behold,there is
development
 the
currency
 is stable.Hardly will you hear bouts of droughts and famine.
On the other hand
Development
 of an
economy
 does not reflect the success story behind it most of
this
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these
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 countries are dependent on loans ,
this
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these
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 loans can be used to develop the
economy
 but have
this
 in mind the citizen will be taxed highly to enable the government
repay
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to repay
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 the loans that have high
intrests
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interests
interest
thus
 resulting to
high
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the high
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 cost of living,
For
instance
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,instance
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 what is happening in most of the
african
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African
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 countries,China has loaned
african
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African
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 countries huge amounts of money in
tune
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the tune
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 of billions,
this
 in return has come back to haunt us whereby the cost of living is unbearable yet the
progress
 is very minute. To sum up,
development
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the development
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 of an
economy
 cannot be weighed by economic
progress
,
Progress
 of an
economy
 can be measured by the stability of the
currency
 and satisfaction from the citizens. 290 WORDS
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