One of the consquences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantacges of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is indeed a fact that the evolution in
healthcare
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sector has
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the life span of individuals.
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essay will discuss how despite few minor drawbacks the advantages of
longer
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life duration are stronger than its demerits. On the one hand, one of the potential disadvantages of the expansion in life duration of people is
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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.
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is because despite severe diseases many people survive for many years due to the efficient healthcare they receive which declines the death rate significantly.
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, the birth rate remains constant or incline.
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, the population increases in a destructive manner.
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, an average individual in China who
recieve
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receive
received
best in class medical facilities survives about 90 to 100 years.
This
has increased the population of the nation.
on the other hand
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • medical care
  • disease management
  • surgical techniques
  • economic growth
  • workforce
  • family bonds
  • social contribution
  • healthcare systems
  • chronic disease
  • geriatric care
  • pension systems
  • resource allocation
  • quality of life
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