One of the consquences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantacges of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is indeed a fact that the evolution in

healthcare

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sector has

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the life span of individuals.

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essay will discuss how despite few minor drawbacks the advantages of

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life duration are stronger than its demerits. On the one hand, one of the potential disadvantages of the expansion in life duration of people is

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overpopulation

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over population

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is because despite severe diseases many people survive for many years due to the efficient healthcare they receive which declines the death rate significantly.

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, the birth rate remains constant or incline.

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, the population increases in a destructive manner.

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, an average individual in China who

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best in class medical facilities survives about 90 to 100 years.

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has increased the population of the nation.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

133 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

life expectancy
medical care
disease management
surgical techniques
economic growth
workforce
family bonds
social contribution
healthcare systems
chronic disease
geriatric care
pension systems
resource allocation
quality of life

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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