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Band 6.5

Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: what are the changes what are the problems you are facing what part of the service would you like to change

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Respected Sir, I am writing
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 letter to complain about the issues I am facing because of the changes to your weekly
bus
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 service along the
route
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 Amsterdam to Noya. Earlier, the option of a new
bus
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 was available for every 15 minutes but now
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 schedule has been changed to 30 minutes.
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, manual checks for
bus
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 tickets are introduced
in addition
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 to buying tickets at the counter before starting the journey. The major problem I am facing is that the new timings are not suitable
to
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for
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 my office working hours.
This
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 being the most populated
route
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 in our area, has
lead
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 to the crowded stops and delayed services along the
route
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.
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, I would like to request some modifications to these changed services. If possible, please add
higher capacity
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higher-capacity
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 buses to the
route
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, especially during peak office hours. As a suggestion, you can
also
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 incorporate
bus
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 cards
instead
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 of tickets to enhance ease
in
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 travel. I will look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Rubina

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about how the changes impact your daily routine to enhance your response.
coherence and cohesion
Although the structure is generally clear, ensure each paragraph fully develops the main idea without any ambiguity.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is appropriate for a complaint letter.
complete response
The request for higher capacity buses and the suggestion of bus cards shows proactive thinking.
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