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Some people think that because children find subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

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Mathematics and philosophy are still counted as the fundamental
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 for the educational system,
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, there are some difficulties to study these
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. On the one hand, particularly, fundamental
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 like math and philosophy begin to be taught to children in compulsory mode as soon as they go to secondary school. Let’s imagine, if I choose other types of
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instead
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 of the fundamental mathematics lesson, I won’t be able to do basic life actions like counting, paying bills, measuring things and so on.
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 that are being taught according to the guideline by the educational officials are usually proven to be useful in general needs and future prospects.
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, these so-called general
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 are still may be beneficial to school-aged children to study early on.
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, educational establishments should give an opportunity to select “what subject they want to learn to keep going” as soon as the children get the general knowledge of fundamental
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.
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, I want to mention that it seems that school-aged pupils don’t know what kind of
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 and
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 necessarily need for their future job and career because they don't have enough rational minds to make
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 kind of essential decision. Most learners don’t need to study deeply into general science, whereas pupils who are obsessed with scientific
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 can discover insight into those difficult
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. In brief, having the freedom to opt the
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 is good for every pupil, but there are potential drawbacks of avoiding
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 that they find hard to comprehend or mentally grasp the idea.
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, I believe that the educational system does have sufficient experience and capability to teach the fundamental
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 compulsively.
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