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Some people think public libraries are necessary, others believe that the public libraries are useless. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #libraries
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 controversial argument whether public
libraries
 are necessary or not. I will discuss both perspectives in the following paragraphs and I am in the opinion
of
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that
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public
libraries
 are still needed for the public. On the one hand, some
people
 consider that public
libraries
 are not functioning as their original purposes.
This
 is because advanced technologies enable
people
 to approach and research
information
 through the Internet.
Therefore
, as time goes by, public
libraries
 benefit
only
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small
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 number of
people
 and it will result in wasting funds
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 would have been used for
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urgent social problems
such
 as subsidies for the poor.
On the other hand
, it is believed that public
libraries
 still play an important role in modern society.
Firstly
, the public
libraries
 have a lot of valuable books in relation to majors and
knowledges
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. On
the
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top of that, the
libraries
 are free,
public
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 can visit the places without carrying financial burdens.
Therefore
, they can rent some books and save their financial resources which would have been used for purchasing the books.
Lastly
, even though it is true that online research is prevalent nowadays, the
information
 they get is not reliable.
For instance
, anybody can upload resources on the Internet, which are not referenced and may be fake.
This
 cause
people
 to seek authentic
information
 for reference when they write assignments or
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.
As a result
, the value of public
libraries
 is still worthy, in terms of providing true
information
. In conclusion,
although
 there is an upsurge
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 of Internet research, public
libraries
 still play a vital role in providing true
information
 with the proven references.
Hence
, I consider they are still worthy to be maintained.
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