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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Part of expertized people orpine that learning a non-native
language
 from the fundamental level of
education
 could be recommended than learning it in advanced
education
 level for children. There are both pros and cons in
this
 argument and
this
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Firstly
, considering on advantages,
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 crucial one is that
student
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students
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 always be a quick-learner at
initial
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 stages of
education
 than after. With
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considerable
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 or continuous curiosity, they tend to be
awared
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aware
awarded
 and getting knowledge on their surrounding.
Therefore
, they may
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anything
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 fast.
Further
, since
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 of subject matters, which they have to be concentrated on, are fewer in
this
 stage.
Hence
, they can perfectly focus on what they are learning than it is in secondary or later levels.
Furthermore
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 period to
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 the linguistic context actively in their life, before they step on
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 the society than it learning
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 minute.
As a result
, the children may have a great opportunity to develop their fluency, vocabulary and other grammatical aspects of the
language
.
This
 will lead to
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 significant
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on
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 speaking
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 foreign
language
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 later stages of their lives.
Moreover
, considering on disadvantages, learning
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 abroad
language
 in
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 stage may be a quite challengeable task for an immature brain of a child who
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 his mother tongue. Sometimes there may be some confusions happen between native and non-native
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. To sum up, I can opine that it is better to learn
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 outside
language
 in
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an earlier
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 stage of
education
 than later since the
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 of advantages exceeds the disadvantages of
this
 notion.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
  • proficiency levels
  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
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