Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

It is undeniable to state that our lives, for now, are not related to modern
technology
.
Technology
has changed lots of living patterns including working. The modern affects both advantages and drawbacks. Even though communities would like to see only benefits, disadvantages affect the society as well as the advantages they get. The changing patterns of living and working are caused by modern
technology
. It is fastened all route of the society.
For instance
, transportation has changed as a faster and longer machine. As well as, communication in companies are more convenient that make the connections or network spread out quickly.
Therefore
,
people
need to learn new things that are
hard
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understandable . No few of employee is unemployed because of lacking modern
skills
. The more benefits
people
who adapt the useful and modern
skills
earn. The more drawbacks
people
who have no wealth to reach those
skills
get. Inequality is clearer nowadays. The development of
technology
is not arisen by the good but
also
the bad. The weakness of the network in each company is always present
that is
a target of terrorists. The hackers who have
skills
would find out the solutions to steal either
information
or money.
Moreover
, most of the
information
is on the internet
that is
easily reachable. If the internet security does not protect well or
people
do not keep their
information
properly, the terrorists will use the
information
any way they want. In conclusion, modern
technology
gain inequality to
people
with changed living patterns. The unadaptive employee is not able to compete in the present companies. The weakness of
technology
always arises
that is
the target of terrorists to steal either
information
or money. Reliable websites as quality security are necessary for communities.
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