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Fewer citizens go to their local museums and galleries than ever before. What are the causes of this? What can be done about this?

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The salon exhibition content is not attractive, lacks differentiation, boring content, it is the gallery of and behind the overall advancement level and the national literacy and social enhancement level is closely linked, many institutions in exhibition design, operations and activities on lack of necessary ability, it is hard to avoid problems in the progress, after all, in some developing countries. The rapid construction and great expansion of the hall were only a decade ago. The problem of advancement must be solved by renovation in the end, and the upgrade of the overall level of the public and the revision of the salon is bound to complement each other. A gallery is a systematic arrangement and intuitive presentation of history and knowledge. It can be said that the folk stories, legends and books we come into contact with are, to some extent, fragmented knowledge. institution are generally organized according to historical vertical lines, and the different cultures, historical sites and cultural relics in different periods are typical and representative, which can reflect the characteristics of The Times and local characteristics. Physical objects are more impressive than words in a book. the hall can cultivate your temperament, make men mellow, women elegant and easy, and
this
 is a real temperament from the bone. an institution is a rare place I like to be alone with myself. Like eating alone, shopping alone or doing other things alone, will make me feel uncomfortable. Even if you stay in your room, playing on the computer and writing, you don't feel lonely or embarrassed, but the world is very quiet. But there's nothing weird, awkward, lonely, or quiet about going to a salon alone. I do not feel disconnected from the world because I see where I come from, where I am, what ancestors I have and what companions I have. Will not lament the ordinary life, because no ordinary people will disappear, and
then
 ordinary people have made history.
On the contrary
, to see history in a gallery, with its lively stories and various ideas, is to feel that the world is so busy and so happy to show it to others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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