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Scientific progress influences our daily life greatly. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#progress #influences #life #development
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It is hard to deny that the scientific advances have let
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the human being a
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 depending more on
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technology
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 a phenomenon leads to an assumption that the far-reaching implications of scientific progress are passive to our
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, as far as
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life
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 quality and efficiency are concerned, I firmly believe that it should be regarded as positive.
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 and foremost, the advances in science have unprecedentedly enhanced the quality of
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 by improving medical technologies. On the one hand, the advanced diagnosing methods facilitate the public to monitor their health conditions at any time via the integrated sensors in their wearable devices or even cell phones, which has been viewed as an efficient approach to discover potential diseases in advance.
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, the progression in science has produced profound influences in boosting the clinical medical technologies, enabling to control serve diseases and expanding lifespan of the human being. To
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 end, the great influence resulting from scientific progress is undoubtedly beneficial to
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societal development. Admittedly, a voice may raise that the
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over-dependence of human beings
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technology is a potential crisis simply because of the assertion that it may lead the public to a lazy
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. Ironically, it is
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due to the fact that there is no necessity for the human to be involved in the monotonous and repeated work that we are able
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 focus more on the meaningful issues and contribute to the societal well-being. Take the case of
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industrialization in the
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 century, where
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 machinery was invented and
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 factory workers were free from the intensive workload. Had those automated machines not been invented, the workers would never have been able to commence their new careers. In a nutshell, I maintain the idea that the astonishing progression in science breeds a pervasive and positive impact in our
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life lives
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 quality and efficiency.
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 vary from person to person, I believe they would be compromised after being exposed to my article.
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