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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that spending money on the protection of wild
animals
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 is pointless. I completely disagree with
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 opinion. From my point of view, it is absurd to argue that wild
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 have no place in
21st
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 century. I believe that wild
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 are a part of the earth so we have no right to allow or encourage the extinction of any species.
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, there is no reason why we should let
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 die out. Others say that wild
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 take up a lot of
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. I think it is
wrong
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 idea because there is a lot of
land
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 for us to live with wild
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.
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, I disagree with idea that protecting wild
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 is
waste
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 of resources. I think one of our problems is
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 of natural habitats because it is incredibly important for people and it ensures the survival of wild
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.
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 problem is indispensable for both. The natural habitats produce oxygen for people and stabilise the earth’s climate. So if we destroyed these areas, the costs of solving problems would far out with the costs of conservation. In conclusion, by protecting wild
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 and their habitats, we maintain the natural balance of all life on earth.
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