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Some people think that schools should select pupils according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have pupils with different abilities to study together. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #schools #pupils #abilities #study
All humans have one or
another
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another skill
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skills
.
Although
 some people will be good in studies
but
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, at the same time other few will be having
skills
 like singing, dancing or painting and all.
However
, without understanding
this
,
still
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 people do debate
on
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this
 topic. In my viewpoint, the
schools
 should admit all
kind
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kinds
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 of
students
 without seeing their academic abilities alone.
This
 essay will examine the topic in detail with relevant examples in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the county not only needs scientists, doctors or lawyers but
also
 the county wants talented people from all other fields
likesports
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like sports
 persons,
artist
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artists
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, and actors. To elaborate, if the
schools
 take admissions based on the
students
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student's
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 academic performance it can cause psychological stress to other pupils.
Moreover
, if all the
students
 became professionally skilled, they may face drastic unemployment issues in future.
In addition
,
this
 may initiate unnecessary competitions among
students
.
On the contrary
, if the
schools
 admit differently skilled
students
 and
also
 encourage them to achieve their dreams can bring pride to the nation.
For example
, if a person
win
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Olympic
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an Olympic
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 medal for his country, nobody will ask about his academic performance
instead
 everyone will feel
delight
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 for his achievement.
In addition
, admitting differently talented pupils can share their ideas with each
others
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other
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 and
this
 can help them to develop more
skills
. Apart from these, pupils even can be more confident in their activities.
Finally
, the
schools
 should understand that individuals are different but everyone has their own potential abilities. In
this
 way, my opinion is the
schools
 should respect the
students
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student's
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skills
 in all manner irrespective of academic abilities alone.
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