IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Should people spend a lot on weddings and birthday parties

#people #weddings #birthday #parties
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Parties are means of celebrating
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
happy and memorable events with family and friends. Programs can be for different occasions
such
Linking Words
 as birthdays and weddings etc. Many people celebrate birthdays and weddings for themselves and relatives. As they want to show their affection and capture memorable moments. Mostly, kids and teenagers are excited about their birthday events as they tend to receive gifts. We planned a birthday festive for our offspring, his cousins and classmates were
also
Linking Words
 invited. Our son felt joyful, as everybody attending the event brought gifts, which made his day.
However
Linking Words
, wedding functions are mostly for adults and couples getting married. It is a social norm of every culture that individuals who have decided to live their lives with each other, will organize a formal event and invite their relatives on the special so that they can share their contented moments.
However
Linking Words
, there is a flip side to celebrating
such
Linking Words
 festivals as it costs an excessive amount of money. It will be ethically and more appropriate to donate the amount to the needy and earn blessings and well wishes.
In addition
Linking Words
, it has become a status symbol to host luxurious birthday bashes and marriage rites. Which made it very difficult for the common people to commemorate
such
Linking Words
 an occasion.
Hence
Linking Words
 leading to depression among the people.
For example
Linking Words
, there are families in our society not having sufficient financial freedom to arrange marriage ceremonies for their children. To conclude, celebrating wedding or birthdays are important. As it allows human beings to adore and appreciate priceless moments.
On the contrary
Linking Words
, it should
also
Linking Words
 be taken into consideration that needless spending on
such
Linking Words
 occasions will have a negative impact on society.
Submitted by aznabeel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: