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The protection of environment is one of the most important issues in the world today. But Government are not doing enough about it to what extent do you think that individual can I help to protect the environment?

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There are several issues are going on in
this
 modern era but the most important issue in the world today is
environment
 and word
environment
 comes with Air,water and
sound
 and because of development
environment
 is affected day by day and individuals and government can take some attention towards these problems and there are several methods to solve these factors One of the reasons for the protection of the
environment
 is to make
Industries
 far from the cities and at the infertile land which is in no use of agriculture sector because if Industry is established at the fertile land
then
 trees and farms have to be cleared which can
also
 be seen as deforestation by
this
 factor
environment
 is
also
 affected and the discharge of harmful chemical gas direct to the atmosphere and discharge of chemical acidic liquid sources in water directly can
also
 be harmful to aquatic animals and can make rase to water
pollution
 and to prevent these factors government should put a restriction or penalty to
Industries
 at their discharge the chemical in a position that may cause less damage to the
environment
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for example
 less excretion of harmful chemicals from sugar mills, automobile
industries
,glass factories and the
next
 reason which I'm going to tell in
next
 paragraph is about
sound
pollution
 which is
also
 a big
environment
 issue
Moreover
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 the
sound
pollution
 is
also
 the big issue of the
environment
 which gave rise to damaging the
environment
 and it is by advance and large machinery used in
industries
 or research institutes which can make the
environment
 polluted as a
sound
 made by these devices and different examples of
sound
pollution
 are heavy exhausts in car and bikes and muscular machines which make more
sound
 in
industries
 In conclusion, the
environment
 is only protected by paying some attention to these problems by both government and individuals by making their desire completed by less harm to the
environment
.
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