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Youngsters have lots of problems but their problems are often ignored by the people running the country. Give solution to the problems faced by young generation.

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The majority of a person who will be running the
country
 in the nearly future is
an
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adolescence
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 in the present day. Undeniable that
youngster
 is more likely intelligence than older people. In my
oppinion
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opinion
, The government should designate a way to gather all of the youth's ideas and pull them up to collaborate with an adult.
Hence
, the following essay is an explanation of my solution for breaking the barrier. In some
country
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, People who are empowered to determine a policy of
country
 still thinking that the only one
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responsibility of
youngster
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 is learning at school which is
ancient
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 idea, Even though the new generation is capable to do the right thing equivalent to an adult
such
 as a
youngster
 should be involved to consider in education policy or offering their ideas at least.
Furthermore
, Proving a stage for an argument in a relevant issue to a
youngster
 which there could be held by the government.
for instance
, a student could
be involve
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discussion
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 about
rule
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 of student's uniform that wearing a student's uniform when they are at school is still necessary clothes or not
becuase
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because
 their parents have to buy new uniform for their child in each a
couple
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 years,
Consequently
, a family must be responsible for inessential living costs.
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, there are several methods to make an involvement between empower people and new generation depend on
a
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prioritized social issues by a government.
However
,
this
 essay definitely offers a way to collaborate with them in order to correctly develop the
country
 through the intense competition era.
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