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Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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The importance of government budgeting money into the right sector can not be emphasised,
that is
 why the
people
 keep arguing about the financial choices made by the government concerning transportation.
This
 is why some
people
 are of the opinion that spending money on
railroad
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 is more important than constructing a new road. I believe
railway
 investment has more benefits and I will give my reasons in
this
 essay.  Nowadays, we see the advantages of
railway
 transport as it is a cheaper and safer means to travel. The incidence of
railway
accident
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 is very low and it is usually not as dangerous as other means of transportation. The citizens can travel long or short distances for about a quarter of what they would spend on a flight ticket or
bus
 fare.
In addition
, there is no rail traffic since the trains work on a schedule, so it is reliable and a good option for employees and students.
On the other hand
, roads are more accessible to
people
 and it is easier to get a
bus
 or taxi going almost anywhere in the country. Constructing even more roads makes it better.
Moreover
, the commercial
bus
 system is a good source of revenue and employment. There are many taxi companies and even the state
bus
 system which has created job opportunities. To conclude, I think
railway
 investment is more reasonable mostly during these periods of overpopulation and road congestion, creating more roads will only add to the existing problem. Trains or trams are bigger and can transport more
people
 and goods at a time
thus
 saving money on energy and less pollution to the environment.
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