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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion

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It is an undeniable fact that
tourism
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 has seen a tremendous surge in the
last
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 5 decades.
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, there are two predominant views where a section of society vehemently deems that tourists are destroying the environment and local beauty, while others emphasize that they are boosting the
economy
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 at a significant rate. My views are similar to the latter view. Apparently, various factors make a section of society deems that incoming
tourism
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 has detrimental effects on the environment and they have reasons to substantiate it.
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 and foremost is the
garbage
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 which is being produced maximally during the tourist season. It has been observed that visitors do not pay respect to the rules and regulations whenever they visit any place of attraction. In fact, tourists throw litter on roads and streets which creates a nuisance and a sense of irresponsibility among the local community.
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, that rubbish destroys the natural beauty of the area, and plastic and other harmful elements from
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 have a catastrophic effect on the surrounding habitat. An example can be observed from the Eiffel Tower in Paris where thousands and tonnes of
garbage
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 are literally ruining the utmost beauty of the tower.
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, some believe that having tourists from all around the globe have a substantial contribution to society and they have myriads of reasons. Chiefly, it aids in the boosting of a country's
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 due to the fact that people around the world will spend their money in order to visit tourist attractions in the country. Ultimately, funds spent on travelling, food and buying local delicacies will reap the benefits of the local community, and
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 increase their
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 at an astonishing rate. Countries
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 as Vietnam saw a significant rise in their
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 in the
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 two decades when they
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 opened all the doors for travel. In my profound opinion, I conclude that even though
tourism
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 might have a negative impact on the local people and the environment through the
garbage
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 which is being produced.
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, I am of the opinion that
tourism
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 will be extremely beneficial for a country to sprout because of the flow of cash it creates
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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