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In order to change their appearance people often turn to plastic surgery. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such an approach?

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With an intention of changing their identity, people usually choose to do
plastic
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surgery
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.In my opinion, the
treatment
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 of
plastic
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surgery
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 would be the safest way of changing an individual
face
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.There are some benefits and drawbacks of
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 method which I'm going to explore in
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 essay. There are several plus points of
plastic
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surgery
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.
Firstly
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,people who wish to change their facial features can do it in a cheaper amount than several small surgeries.The total expense required in
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comparatively
 less than mini surgeries like replacement of wider
cheek bones
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, thicker lips and ear shape.
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 small surgeries will be very expensive for a single
person
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.
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, middle-aged women can choose
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treatment
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 if they are suffering from skin problems like acne,pimples,
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 etc.
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 of spending a large amount on cosmetics,
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treatment
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 will solve their problems
permanantly
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permanently
. While there may be some positive reviews of
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 approach, the disadvantages of
plastic
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surgery
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 come along with them.
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plastic
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surgery
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 gives a
person
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 a final and
permanant
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permanent
 change in their entire life. People cannot remove the artificial mask placed on their
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face
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faces
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.
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, the official documents that contain the
person
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's previous photograph have to be changed
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. Passports, driving
license
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licenses
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, bank account
card
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cards
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 are some of the examples where
alteration
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alterations
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 need to be done. The overall process of modifying these documents after the
treatment
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 will be very tedious and troublesome for the
person
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.
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, the post
maintainence
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maintenance
 of the
treatment
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 is very high. Dermatologists advised many costly ointments that are required to keep the
plastic
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 moisturized for a long time.There's
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 a restriction on using daily
face
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 soaps during
bath
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baths
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. There are special soaps
which
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that
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 can only be used. After that,
an
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intense care should be taken to avoid any sharp
obejcts
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objects
 touching their
face
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. In conclusion, I think that
plastic
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surgery
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 is the most suitable option to change your identity as
its
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it's
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 relatively cheaper than other small treatments,keeping in mind that care needs to be taken after the
treatment
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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