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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollutionof land and sea. Some people think that they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniably true that
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the use
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 of
plastic
bags
 for shopping has led to
the
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undesirable changes in land and
sea
. Some individuals opine that they should be banned. I totally agree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion of prohibiting
plastic
bags
. The
first
 and foremost reason for the prohibition of
plastic
bags
 is
its
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their
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 non-biodegradable nature which
threaten
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 both
sea
 and land
life
.
This
 is because when these
bags
 cannot be reused,
these
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they
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 need to be burnt which produce chemical gases.
Consequently
,
this
contribute
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contributes
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 to
the
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air pollution.
Moreover
, these are harmful
for
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sea
 animals if found in
sea
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the sea
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. If
sea
 creatures
accidently
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accidentally
 swallow these
bags
, it makes their
life
 in danger.
For instance
, a survey conducted by 'The Times' reported that 30% of
sea
life
 is found to be dead because of choking
plastic
bags
. The
second
 reason
of
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 banning
plastic
bags
 is to reduce the wastage of money spend on making
plastic
bags
 nationwide. For the manufacturing of
plastic
bags
, machines and new materials are used as
plastic
bags
 cannot be recycled and reused. As
everytime
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 more money is needed to make these non-recyclable
bags
, it affects the economy.
However
, if these
bags
 are banned and people are encouraged to use recyclable and reusable
bags
, it will prohibit the wastage of money of making
such
bags
 again and again. To illustrate, it is surveyed by 'The Reuse' that a country
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that
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 uses recyclable
bags
 has grown economically more than a nation
which
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that
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 uses
plastic
bags
 for shopping. To conclude,
plastic
bags
 should be completely prohibited in order to make
sea
 and land
life
 healthier and happier due to their non-biodegradable property.
Furthermore
, to improve the economy of a country, these non-recyclable
bags
 should be banned.
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