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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries, working or travelling for a year before pursuing university
studies
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 has become increasingly popular among young people after completing high
school
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. There are both merits and demerits for both and I will explain that in detail in
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 essay. Working after high
school
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 enables
students
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 to get experience in communication and how to deal with problems which will help them for
career
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 growth. Many
students
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 now a day’s are working in café or small companies to get the experience. ,
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 some prefer travelling before joining universities s that they can explore the world and meet new people.
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 will help them to make new contacts which will ultimately be useful for their
career
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.
Students
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 who have work experience perform better in his or her academics because they had already learnt how to deal with tuff situations.
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, some
students
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 start liking their job and quit their
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 they only focus on earnings. If they take break or
gap
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 of the year they find it difficult to study they lost the touch with their
studies
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. They started liking earning money so they stopped their
studies
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 and concentrate on earning which will ultimately affect their
career
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.
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, if a youngster wants to explore the place after high
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 he can but he has to return for
studies
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 after the
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instead
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 of continuing his travels. To ,summaries young people can work or travel after high
school
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 as long as they complete their education after a
gap
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 of a year. But if they don’t return back to
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 they are spoiling their own
career
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. So we have to encourage
students
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 to complete their
studies
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 after taking a
gap
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadened horizons
  • valuable life experiences
  • personal growth and development
  • engaging with different cultures
  • overcoming challenges
  • acquiring new skills
  • maturity
  • self-awareness
  • work experience
  • employment prospects
  • academic momentum
  • re-adjust
  • study habits
  • academic performance
  • financial aspect
  • pursuing certain activities
  • financial strain
  • university tuition
  • living expenses
  • perceived delay
  • inadequacy
  • anxiety
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