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It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages of change outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no denying the fact that
change
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 is part of our lives
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 our different lifestyles.
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 it is a commonly held belief that changing anything in
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's lives will help them to improve their ability to face any situation in the future, there is an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that we should accept changes as part of our daily
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. On one hand, trying to avoid any
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 will be more difficult than dealing with it
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 even if the decision to take the step to deal with
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 will be challenging and will take time, it will increase individual maturity.
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, when
people
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 face anything that changes their routine, they will have more experience in dealing with their
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 situations.
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,
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 is a crucial part of
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,
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 it is like a key that opens a lot of opportunities.
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, moving to a new city will be as challenging at
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but sometimes the job opportunity in the home town was less than the opportunity in the new place.
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, some
people
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 prefer to have everything remain the same throughout their lives. It is possible to say that fear of
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 will affect their ability to try to
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 anything.
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, these types of individuals will not improve their quality of
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.
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, successful
people
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 need to take a risk at least once in their plans, so any
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 in their plans must be acceptable to them. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I strongly believe that the advantages of
change
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 outweigh the disadvantages.

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development
Write a clear line at the start of each paragraph that states the main idea and how it answers the question.
coherence
Use simple joining words like and, but, also, because, so, then to make ideas flow.
grammar
Keep sentences short and clear. If a line is long, break it into two.
content
Give 1 or 2 real life examples to show how change can help or not help.
grammar
Check small mistakes in spelling and cap. For example, 'For instance' is two words and the i is small.
task response
The writer takes a clear view and states it in the end.
coherence
The essay uses a compare and contrast form with both sides shown.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adaptability
  • resilience
  • stagnation
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • instability
  • stress
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • innovation
  • technology
  • quality of life
  • flexibility
  • embrace
  • transformative
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