school children are using computers in school more than ever.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and gave your own opinion

Computers
are one of the best finds of
modern
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era.schools are focusing to provide education to
children
by mode of
artifical
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artificial
intelligence.In
this
essay,I will discuss
about
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the merits and demerits of the
computers
To begin
,
the
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computers
have improved the
life
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of many people as well as
school
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schoolchildren
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children
around the world.
For instance
,every working place in
this
world has
requirement
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a requirement
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of
computers
to manage their business so in that
case
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children
need to learn better skills of
computers
to compete in
this
competitive world.
Moreover
, with
invention
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the invention
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of
internet
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the internet
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which provides knowledge on
large
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a large
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scale so in order to use
internet
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the internet
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computers
are very much required.
on the other hand
, despite the upside of
this
trajectory
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the drawbacks cannot be undermined.
Firstly
one of the major bad effects of
data
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the data
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processor
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is that it
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effects
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affects
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health
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the health
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of the
children
.
For example
, a child who
spend
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a lot of time sitting on screens
of
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or
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computers
become obese as there is
lack
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a lack
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of physical exercise and weakens the eye muscle which can cause major problems related to their eyes.
Secondly
,school kids get knowledge about various illegal activities through the source of internet via
computers
which is very dangerous for them and society To conclude, with the above arguments,we have
find
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computers
has
it
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own pros and cons .
Hence
, the negative impact can be reduced by using the
computers
wisely
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