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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed becaus of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make

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People have widely differing views with regard to the question of whether the rising trend of communicating via technological devices. From my perspective,
although
this
 trend has some obvious benefits, I would argue that there are more drawbacks. On the one hand, no sensible person could deny that mobile phones,
in particular
 and technological devices, in general, has tremendously promoted and facilitated our
communicaion
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communication
, bridging the gap between people. These devices could come in handy in emergencies. A case in point is when it is crucial to call an imm
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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