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It will be better for both society and individuals if driverless cars—cars can drive themselves— become more widely used. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
In contemporary society, a large number of
people
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 choose
driverless
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cars
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 rather than driving by themselves. Personally, I believe that the widespread use of autonomous
cars
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 is more beneficial for society and
people
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 and I would give reasons in the following paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
For a variety of reasons, the effects of
driverless
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cars
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 have deleterious impacts on the whole society.
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,
people
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 might gradually lose the capability to drive which ability is an essential technique. Controlling by the computer system,
drivers
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generally
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 not required to know how to drive.
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，
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 autonomous vehicles may not work well with pedestrians. Nobody has figured out how to determine what a pedestrian would do. In
such
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situation
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, if
drivers
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 lose
of
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driving skills, they could be in serious danger where both
drivers
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 and
pedestrian
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pedestrians
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 are
injury
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. What is more? It is well documented that the unemployment rate may increase in
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 area. There is a movement that says
people
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 do not need public transportation anymore with autonomous vehicles because
cars
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 could follow each other so closely.
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, many transit jobs
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 as uber
drivers
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, taxi
drivers
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 and so on would be out of jobs or would disappear because
people
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 prefer to choose
driverless
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cars
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 which provides more convenience for citizens.
Body paragraph 2
Nerveless,
driverless
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cars
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 would bring numerous benefits for individuals.
Firstly
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,
this
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 is could free
driver’s
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 hand which allow
people
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 to do other useful activities. For those take the car to work or school and take the car to go home, and
then
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 pick them up at the end of the day. Doing things in the car
such
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 as doing tasks or chatting with others is a good way to save time. A
second
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benefits
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 is that autonomous vehicles is likely to a dramatic reduction in accidents which increases owner’s safety. Many of the devices
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 as automatic barking, collision-avoidance systems, blind-spot monitoring and lane controls would help
people
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 achieve a lot fewer traffic death.
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, Self-driving
cars
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 can trigger sensors quickly than
human
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 that
people
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 would take a few seconds for them to make sense to stop in dangerous situations.
Conclusion
All in all,
although
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driverless
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cars
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 would bring more benefits for
people
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 who are busy at work or be afraid of driving by themselves, it leads to some problems on their ability for driving and
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employment problems for some employers.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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