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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argued that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both point of view and give your own opinion.

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It is clear that there is no doubt that every country has
crimes
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 and punishments for that. Despite some
people
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 assert that there should be exact punishments according to the
crimes
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 done by
people
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, others accepted that decision of the punishments depends on the conditions of a particular
crime
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 and the offenders how to commit the
crime
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. In
this
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 essay, I will explain both sides of the argument in detail and provide my opinion. On the one hand, some
people
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 agreed that penalizing should be specific depending on the types of
crime
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.
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, the fixed penalty can help to reduce the number of
crimes
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.
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, offenders can realize the law and regulations, and
punishment
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 encourages them to think again and again before they commit the violets.
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, nonadjustable
punishment
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 can give a solution to control the number of
crimes
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 and some
people
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 accepted the exact
punishment
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.
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, others admit that offences should be reckoned as per the situation of personal
crime
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 and reason for committing as for self-defences.
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,
people
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 have to commit offences in order to protect themselves in some cases.
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, every court has enacted self-defence law in every country for self-protection and
people
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 claim that
crime
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 should be judged as per situations of commitment. To conclude,
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 the penalty of violation can be considered according to the reason of offending, in my opinion, each type of
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 should be nonadjustable
punishment
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 in order to decrease and control
crime
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 rates in the world.
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