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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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high school must be included unpaid community service. I agree with the given statements on the basis of learning and studying responsibility, looking at the situation of helpless
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, volunteering can improve
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 skills of students.
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 during
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 students have to speak with different individuals who need help.
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their problems of
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, to other humans in order to rise fond and aids.
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part of school activities can help students to set their perception about volunteerism. It goes as a systematic way of thinking and liability.
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 they take on the seriousness of the matter.
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social unpaid work should be made a mandatory part of the high school program. Our nation will continue to prosper and flourish if there are more well-educated individuals being raised. Volunteering is essential for life for
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 who have a difficult situation.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • compulsory part
  • high school programs
  • sense of duty
  • social responsibility
  • essential life skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • leadership
  • work experience
  • employable
  • community improvement
  • local community
  • time management
  • empathy
  • compassionate attitude
  • diversion from academics
  • critics argue
  • varying quality
  • inconsistency
  • students’ experiences
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