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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasing common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages.

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Mobile phones are extensively revolutionizing these days. In recent times, cell phones are more commonly used to make the payment for things. While some
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 development, others are of the view that it has several drawbacks. In
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 with, payments made through online apps are more convenient to
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 as it reduces the time for individuals to pay.
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, human beings are not required to put so much effort to make a transaction successful.
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, earlier when
people
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 had to make payments, they had to travel all the way to banks or the respective place to complete the purchase. Nowadays, due to the advancement in technology
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 as
Gpay
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, Paytm, Phonepay etc its become very easier to send money from one place to another.
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, our lives have become more efficient. Applications that are used through which money is being sent online is becoming much safer.
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, one of the important
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 of paying via software is that
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 more
secured
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 when compared to the usage of debit or credit cards.
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, gadgets are becoming
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 for
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 to carry rather than cards.
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, when cards are carried in the wallets
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 very risky because if it gets stolen
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 all the confidential data will be used and hacked.
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,
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 of transaction done online is more effective. By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my position that the development of technology has enhanced our lives by making it convenient and
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 safe.
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 moved from traditional to online modes.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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