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Some cities have few control over design and construction on housing and office buildings. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In the contemporary epoch, governments in different areas have put
regulations
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 on
construction
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 projects.
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 some
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 believe that they should have the freedom to decide the structure of their home, I believe that these rules are there to ensure the
safety
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 of the buildings. I will be discussing about advantages and disadvantages in the essay below. On the one hand, one of the major disadvantages of putting the
regulations
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 on the
design
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 of a house. Some
people
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 believe they have the right to
design
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 their own houses and workplaces in their own way.
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 means that, if these
people
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 paid an enormous amount of money for the
construction
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, they want to have more control over the
design
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 of their place.
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,
according to
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 a report submitted by the BBC, most of the homeowners are not happy with the outlook of their house after the
construction
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 is finished, because of all the restrictions imposed by the authorities.
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, some
people
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 want to
design
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 their dream houses as they wish.
On the other hand
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, these
regulations
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 on locals are set to ensure their
safety
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according to
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 the geographical locations. If
construction
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 workers and civil engineers do not follow the
safety
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 guidelines, it will result in a building which will be unsafe during natural disasters. A recent example is that many newly constructed buildings in Asyut, Egypt, collapsed during an earthquake because they were not made by following proper guidelines.
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, it is quintessential to follow the
regulations
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 to keep the fail-safe in place. In conclusion,
after
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this
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 essay has manifested the points mentioned above, it can be reiterated that the government is trying to ensure the
safety
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 of the buildings by having some control over them.
Although
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 some
people
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 want to have more rights
while
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 designing their own home, I believe the
safety
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 of the
people
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 residing there is
also
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 equally important.

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structure
Clarify your main view in the intro and keep it clear in each paragraph.
structure
Tie ideas together with simple links and keep each paragraph to one main point.
language
Improve grammar and shorten long sentences for better flow.
content
Use specific, clear examples and explain how they show your point.
structure
Finish with a strong end that restates your view and sums up key ideas.
content
You discuss both sides and show a clear view.
structure
You use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to show a plan.
content
You give real examples to back up your point.
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