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Today, majority of children are raised by their grandparents due to the fact that their parents are busy working. To what extent do you think that it affects the whole family?

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this
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parents
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 are engaging in their work so
grandparents
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 have taken the responsibility of mould toddlers.I partially support
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 scenario due to various reasons that I will explain in
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To begin
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child
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 has mould by
grandparents
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.
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,majority of the
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 are taking rest after retirement so they do not have any other responsibilities and dreams in their life
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 if they get chance to interact with children make them more energetic and healthy.For evidence, a survey conducted in one of the cities showed old people who have spent time with kids have the lowest health issues.
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, nowadays the life expenditures are high for that the
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 both should be employees to meet the living expenses and progenitors could reduce tension about their kid when the
child
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 with their
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.
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,more than
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grandparents
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 have the ability to express more love and care to the children so they will happier and enjoyment
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 grandmothers could narrate moral stories to kids that enhance their imagination ability and they should aware of the morals of life.
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,due to various ,
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this
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 trend would not give a positive effect.in many families
parents
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 are busy with their work
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therefore
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child
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 has lost their affection to
parents
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 which leads to reduce the bonding between family members.
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,many old people are unhealthy so they could not take care of the
child
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.For evidence,many toddlers are naughty during childhood so
grandparents
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 could not run with them if they are in trouble
grandparents
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 could not protect them. To conclude, it is undeniable fact that the necessity of employment for both
parents
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 so nurturing
child
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 is the responsibility of both
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 and
grandparents
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. It is hoping,in ,future each family member can create abound between themselves.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Generational gap
  • Cultural heritage
  • Primary caregivers
  • Modern parenting techniques
  • Family bonds
  • Emotional development
  • Social development
  • Role reversal
  • Physical demands
  • Mental health
  • Direct involvement
  • Missed milestones
  • Guilt or stress
  • Wisdom and patience
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