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Globalization is positive for economies but its negative sides should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#globalization #economies
A vast majority of people
convinced
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 that
globalization
have
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 a positive impact on the economies,
however
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 there is
also
 a negative side of
globalization
, which should not be omitted.
This
 essay agrees with
such
 a viewpoint and
firstly
 it will discuss the benefits of
globalization
.
Secondly
, disadvantages which the
globalization
 brought up to the
countries
 will be discussed.
First
 of all,
needles
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needless
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 to say that
trough
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through
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globalization
countries
 and
companies
 have
an
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access to the global
markets
.
Instead
 of selling their product in their own country, they can expand business and export it to
the
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other international
markets
.
Besides
, competition
on
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 the global
markets
 affected industries in some developing
countries
 and
usually
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 it brings new technologies and innovation.
For instance
, there are two multinational
companies
such
 as Apple and Samsung who has
a
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competition on the global
markets
,
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 and trying to improve their products every year. Despite on positive sides of
globalization
, there are
also
 some negative effects. One of the biggest minuses is job insecurity. Before
globalization
 skilled staff got employment in sectors where they receive a high salary,
however
, due to
globalization
, there are many people who are seeking
for
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a job and
companies
 take
an
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advantage
from
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 the cheap
labor
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. To exemplify, there are
companies
 who transfer their production
in
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 less developed
countries
 by virtue of
the
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cheap
labor
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labour
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. To conclude, the cultural and economic advantages of
globalization
 have concomitant tradeoffs.
This
 essay supports the claim that
globalization
 has a dramatic impact on the economies,
however
, authorities should be cautious about
pessimistic
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 side.
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