Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
have different views about whether it is efficient to improve public
health
by building more sports facilities. While it will
does
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work
to some extent, I believe that there are
also
some alternatives to help
people
strengthen their bodies. On the one hand, advocates for increasing the
amount
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of
sport
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venues have said that
this
could give
people
more chances to leave their house and do
exercises
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.
For example
, if there is a new place near the
neighborhood
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,
people
tend to come there because it is spacious enough for
people
to do
exercise
and
also
have a high-quality environment might be surrounded by trees and flowers where is more suitable for
people
to go.
Moreover
, as we all know that it is difficult for
people
to do
exercise
everyday
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due to
your
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busy
work
and lack of self-control ability. If there is a site that
every one
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in their just for
a
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same goal, which creates a positive
exercise
atmosphere will push you more, and you can
also
go with
other person
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to have
a
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mutual supervision each other to reach a better effect.
On the other hand
,
although
this
measure seems easy to do and logical, it is not always the only path to improve
health
care. Some critics say that it does not
work
at all, which may just
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decoration rather than playing its function. A new sports
center
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,
for instance
, is constructed
near by
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a block that
mainly
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is mainly
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populated with commuters who
too
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are too
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busy for their
work
to do
exercise
. The major problem for
people
don not do
exercise
regularly is that they lack awareness of the importance of doing some sports. Other options like holding free lectures about
health
care containing the content of the benefits about keep fit can
also
achieve the goal of improving public
health
. In conclusion, I think it is ideal to both providing
the
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adequate numbers of places and equipment to do
such
exercises and promoting the benefits of keeping the body fit. So, the best solution to keep our population to be healthy is
mixing
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those ideas mentioned above and
then
, create
the
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common viewpoint.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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