Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
People
have different views about whether it is efficient to improve public health
by building more sports
facilities. While it does work
to some extent, I believe that there are also
some alternatives to help people
strengthen their bodies.
On the one hand, advocates for increasing the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
sport
venues have said that Change the noun form
sports
this
could give people
more chances to leave their house and do exercises
. Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
For example
, if there is a new place near the neighborhood
, Change the spelling
neighbourhood
people
tend to come there because it is spacious enough for people
to do exercise and also
have a high-quality environment might be surrounded by trees and flowers where is more suitable for people
to go. Moreover
, as we all know that it is difficult for people
to do exercises every day due to your busy work
and lack of self-control ability. If there is a site that everyone in their just for a
same goal, which creates a positive atmosphere will push you more, and you can Change the article
the
also
go with other people
to have a
mutual supervision each other to reach a better effect.
Remove the article
apply
On the other hand
, although
this
measure seems easy to do and logical, it is not always the only path to improve health
care. Some critics say that it does not work
at all, which may just a
decoration rather than playing its function. A new Add a missing verb
be a
sports
center
, Change the spelling
centre
for instance
, is constructed nearby a block that is
mainly populated with
commuters who Change preposition
by
too
busy for their Add a missing verb
are too
work
to do exercise. The major problem for people
don not have physical activities regularly is that they lack awareness of the importance of doing some sports
. Other options like holding free lectures about health
care containing the content of the benefits about keep fit can also
achieve the goal of improving public health
.
In conclusion, I think it is ideal to both providing the
adequate numbers of places and equipment to do Correct article usage
apply
such
exercises and promoting the benefits of keeping the body fit. So, the best solution to keep our population to be healthy is mixSome people
say that the best way to improve public health
is by increasing the number of sports
facilities. Others, however
, say that this
would have little effect on public health
and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. those ideas mentioned above and then
, create the
common viewpoint.Correct article usage
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