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Nowadays a large amount of advertising aimed at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#amount #children #effects
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strong
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 manner.so advertising is the one main important way to communicate the
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 to others.so,it
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 to make a market place.As per the above topic
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 lot of advertising
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 at
children
.So I am not strongly agreed with
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what ever
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 it has more controversion. There are two kinds of impacts
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 with the volume of advertising.The effects can be divided into 2 parts.even
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 positive and
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other wise
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 may be negative.The advantages are
children
 can update with the new technology and new updations of educational
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Otherwise
,negative impacts can not be eliminated.it can way the to create upset minds for the parents.it means that
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income
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person
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 to person.Rich families can fulfil
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 kids
necessacities
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necessities
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poor
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 family try to fulfil
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 basic requirements.so they can not
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 as those expected.but kids minds are similar.
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 they are expecting from
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 parents.advertising is making huge moral.so
as a result
 of that one party loss
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 happiness.
Nevertheless
 if advertising target more
children
,they always move to expenses.
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there
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future
 savings.
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,those
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 lot of advertising
target
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 kids for fast foods.even though they have to sacrifice
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future
 healthy life.
As
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a
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conclusion,The promotion benefits may
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be have
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 more.but we can not ignore negative impacts as well.so
children
 should be practice to take logical decisions from their primary stage.
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