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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that the school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give own opinion

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The way of becoming a better person in the society should be taught to the youngster, indeed some of the population have an idea that the teaching process should be carried out by their
parents
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 others maintaining an idea that the
school
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teachers
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 have the responsibility on that.
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parents
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 should have a major responsibility more than
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teachers
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. On the one hand, the academy is a good place to give advice, despite whether
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 are their
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 advisors and, in general, a student goes to
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 for 13 years, so
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 is students’
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 homeplace. Nowadays, the majority of schools tends to deliver the subjects and maintain a rat race over the syllabus to cover it quickly
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 and prepare the students for the exams.
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 do not have sufficient time to focus on pupils’ discipline because of the huge syllabus that they have to cover within the year/ semester.
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, mother and the father are the
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 two guiders to their small ones in
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 world without any doubt, as they will be with their
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 for at least two to three years without knowing anybody else in the society,
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 most of the teenagers
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 spend half of their time in home during the schooling period. As mothers or fathers know all the confidential problems of their children, they can open their inner life to their mother or father easily.
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, if a student gets used to drugs by a fault, he/she can be revealed the story to their protectors because a child knows all the facilities were provided to them by their
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.
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, students are aware that excuses are possible with their
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 over department
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 easily. In conclusion, because the
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 have more free time to deal with their youth other than the subjects as in the high-
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, they are most suitable to teach good habits to their children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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