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In recent years,the number of crime committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. What are the possible causes and suggest some solutions.

In the modern
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,one of the major problems faced by the public is enhancements in crime.it has been seen that the number of youngsters who have been involved in crimes
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 been increasing in urban areas throughout the world.In
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 phenomenon and will suggest some possible solutions to overcome these obstacles. On the one hand,due to various ,
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illegal
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 are increasing among youths .
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, the majority of people is facing the problem of lack of employment opportunities
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, they are forced by society to engage in
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activities
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 as theft,murder to acquiring
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.For evidence, a survey conducted in a significant jail in a metropolitan city shows most of the offences engaged in criminal
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 to earn
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 for their family.
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,the use of social media
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 a major role in these scenarios while surfing, adults
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 to fell
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 the trap of
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 so
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mafia
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 would blackmail them to involve
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 .To prove that, a Few days ago there was news regarding an adult death .He had been addicted to social media and video games for a long period so he fell down into the trap of a
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mafia
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.They continuously asked
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money
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 from him they forced him to theft
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 from his
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 ,continues blackmailing from the
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 made his mind frustrated so he committed suicide.
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,in
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 are busy with their work so they do not have enough time for the kids which leads to curtailing the bonding between progenitors and
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that children are scared to share their problems
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parents
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 accidentally they commit crimes.
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,there are plenty of solutions to eradicate
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 obstacle. the government should make sure employment opportunities for the younger generation
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 could plummet their frustration and financial issues.
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,
parents
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 should elaborate bonding with kids that helps them to teach moral values in children
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 while schooling teachers should help them to enhance their knowledge in academics and acquire enough qualification for individuals future . To conclude,several reasons are lead to the increase in illegal
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 ,with the help of the government,
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 and teachers public can solve
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 problem.it is predicted,in the
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future the number of crimes will plummet.

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