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Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will be no longer necessary because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, as an inevitable thing of the omnipresent development of the entertainment industry, it is considered to have a modification from the real one to the online photos or videos of that object so that we can see it by using a computer.
Therefore
, a heated debate arises regarding whether people can see historical objects and works of
art
 by some clicks on of mouse
instead
 of going to these
museums
 or not. In my opinion, I am totally opposed to
this
 viewpoint.
To begin
 with, we have no inspiration when seeing an online picture
instead
 of contemplating a real
art
 object. To be more precise, the display in
museums
 or
galleries
 allow us to contemplate these arts from a variety of different views, with the supplement of lights and decorations, it provokes people’s inspiration and brings them unforgettable moment, which can not be replicated by a glimpse of a computer screen.
Besides
 that, we cannot distinguish between the real objects with the fake ones through a picture, leading to a concession of the pervasive printing and copying vogue.
Furthermore
,
museums
 and
art
galleries
 are not only landmarks of that city but
also
 a place to preserve these objects. To be more precise, these
museums
 are an important component of the tourist industry which attracts numerous tourists from abroad every year.
As a result
 of the appearance of
museums
, people in these places, especially children, can
also
 know about their history these traditions and be proud of their heritage.
Finally
,
museums
 and
art
galleries
 play an irreplaceable role in keeping these professions be safe from being broken or stolen. To sum up, I complete considering that despite the burgeoning of the modern world,
museums
 and
art
galleries
 still play integral characteristics in impulsing inspirations and preserving these arts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
  • immersion
  • local tourism
  • economy
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