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There are severe social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve these problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#consequences #shortages #cities #government
In today’s world, many
people
 have suffered from a scarcity of housing due to lots of problems that they have been encountered. Some individuals believe that governments are able to exploit all facilities by creating jobs in urban areas to transform them into convenient places to live in. I entirely agree with that statement and I will give an explanation in my upcoming body paragraphs.
To begin
 with, economic problems are the crucial things that most of the
people
 throughout the world are confronting which caused them couldn’t own their dwell.
For instance
, in Iran, in the
last
 ten years, due to sanctions of western countries, power abused and corruption led to the biggest inflation in our country.
Moreover
, construction has been reduced because of the increase in the price of the chemical materials
such
 as concrete and specific sand used for it. So, the
government
 can cope with these problems by devoting the unused land to low prices and give them unbacked loans for the
people
 who didn’t have houses.
On the other hand
, terrorism is a catastrophic issue for the countries which are welcomed to surplus immigrants who have been damaged by these incidents. A case in point,
this
 phenomenon has happened 7 years ago in Turkey. They have been accepting 3.4 million Syrian
people
 after the war began.
Nevertheless
,
this
 problem caused the
government
 couldn't provide enough houses for them.
Therefore
, The United Nation Council have to play a key role on halting the unstoppable war in Syria and
also
 appropriate or allocate budget to help turkey
government
 to provide education, working, and rudimentary things for their dwelling. To conclude, providing houses for every human being is one of the duties and responsibilities that
government
 should take into consideration.
However
,
this
 action needs all parts of the community’s help
such
 as private and public affairs to overcome it.

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