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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Television has affected people communication with each other.

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Most
people
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 agree that
television
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 causes a lack of communication between
people
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. In my opinion,
television
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 shows really do influence how
people
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 communicate . I feel
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 way for two reasons , which I will explore in the following essay.
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 of all,
people
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 spend a lot of time watching shows and their favourite programs , and by the end of the day , they don’t have much time to talk to a friend or socialize with others.
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, I always schedule myself according to my
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 shows . Lately, I have started to feel that
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 has affected my life ,even when I was with a friend, I just imagined myself going back to my house and watching my favourite show.
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, while you watching
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 all day , you actually don’t have a lot to talk about, even when you want to socialize what can you possibly say? How does your tv show' actor spend his day?.
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, I have a friend whom I see sometimes, every time I see her she starts to talk about the
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 show that she sees and I noticed that she is very obsessed with it , she doesn’t talk about anything else. Actually, what bothers me is that she talks about it like that are real-life events. In conclusion,
television
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 has a great impact on our lives .I believe that
television
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 affects the way we communicate with each other.
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 is because
television
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 has become our priority , and other
people
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 maybe do not have the ability to stop watching.

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