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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Television has affected people communication with each other.

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Most
people
 agree that
television
 causes a lack of communication between
people
. In my opinion,
television
 shows really do influence how
people
 communicate . I feel
this
 way for two reasons , which I will explore in the following essay.
First
 of all,
people
 spend a lot of time watching shows and their favourite programs , and by the end of the day , they don’t have much time to talk to a friend or socialize with others.
For example
, I always schedule myself according to my
television
 shows . Lately, I have started to feel that
television
 has affected my life ,even when I was with a friend, I just imagined myself going back to my house and watching my favourite show.
Secondly
, while you watching
television
 all day , you actually don’t have a lot to talk about, even when you want to socialize what can you possibly say? How does your tv show' actor spend his day?.
For instance
, I have a friend whom I see sometimes, every time I see her she starts to talk about the
television
 show that she sees and I noticed that she is very obsessed with it , she doesn’t talk about anything else. Actually, what bothers me is that she talks about it like that are real-life events. In conclusion,
television
 has a great impact on our lives .I believe that
television
 affects the way we communicate with each other.
This
 is because
television
 has become our priority , and other
people
 maybe do not have the ability to stop watching.
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