Some people think that managers should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is an actual problem in
work
society, according to some of them, the person who must solve problems of the company is the manager when the others claim that the
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process is important too for employees. From my point of view, as
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of the corporation affects
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every member equally,
workers
should be necessarily involved in that situation.
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essay will include my own opinion and both sides of
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case will be discussed. Generally, the main mission of managers is
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all the situations and try to eliminate threats
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the
work
.
However
,
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company person has more experience and own performance depending on the situations. Or to be more precise, other members obviously have practical or theoretical
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knowledge
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about the topic.
Furthermore
, it will be
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to use the power of
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and
then
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for the benefit of an organization,
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hang it on managers. And to realize it a lot of conversation about the theme must be provided and it needs free choices of simple
workers
. In that
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they can chare with fresh ideas.
Although
, professional managers are people who
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well than lazy and helpless
workers
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the head of
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to discuss decision-making processes. That’s why
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trusts them better than others. The
next
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every people should do what they must to do. Because
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other people have to do some important works too. Not everyone can agree with that. Doing additional works is not easy too, especially if some of them are not masters of their job. In the working
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everything should be
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. Taking everything into account, I believe that, lower
workers
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of them
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their own way to solve problems that can improve the situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • top-down approach
  • hierarchical structure
  • grassroots level
  • strategic planning
  • on-the-ground experience
  • inclusive management
  • employee engagement
  • democratic process
  • transparency
  • cohesion
  • morale
  • practical insights
  • long-term goals
  • mutual respect
  • resistance to change
  • team dynamics
  • broader perspective
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